Day 144: Move explanatory phrases to reduce comma use.

Every comma creates a momentary pause. When you have many commas in a sentence, you create many pauses, and the sentence will seem awkward and unpleasant to read. Consider this correctly punctuated sentence.

“The book, which is red, slipped, as if it were a bar of wet soap, from my fingers.”

The two phrases that make this sentence seem awkward are “which is red” and “as if it were a bar of wet soap.” We can move these two phrases to reduce the number of commas in the sentence. Now we have the following sentence.

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“The red book slipped from my fingers as if it were a bar of wet soap.”

Here’s the point: If you need commas to include a descriptive phrase in a sentence, consider whether or not you can move the descriptive phrase and reduce the number of commas. If you can, you probably should.