Day 79: Put clarifying information at the end of the sentence.

Long sentences can be confusing. One way that writers make long sentences confusing is by including clarifying information in the middle of the sentence. The writer begins the sentence, explains something, and then continues to the end. Consider this example.

“An educator with an ineffective pedagogy, the basic philosophy that guides the educator’s instructional decision-making, will have difficulty keeping students engaged in a lesson.”

The problem here is that the description of “pedagogy” interrupts the idea being expressed. We can use this tip to revise the sentence and put the descriptive information at the end, giving us

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“An educator will have difficulty keeping the students engaged if he has an ineffective pedagogy, the basic philosophy that guides the educator’s instructional decision-making.”

This revised sentence contains the same information as the original but in a different, more effective, order. Now the subject and verb are together, and the potentially confusing word, pedagogy, is still with its description.